READ && REVIEW, please. THE NEXT BIG THING?

You have a terrific writing style although honestly I didn't read the whole thing because I have a hard time reading while the t.v is on. But I can see you are terrific with descriptions. I don't know if that story would get published (seeing as though I didn't read the whole thing) but if you continue writing and getting better at it, you could be a best selling author in no time.